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This a lovely, eerie adventure and I really love it!

I noticed quite a few typos and grammatical errors though, and it hurts my heart because the story and your turn of phrase is wonderful. In case you intend to update the file again, here are the ones I spotted:

  • "One of themt, of course..." (pg. 1) should be "them" 
  • "You boss feel this" (pg. 1) should be "Your boss feels this"
  • "and taken tothe dark" (pg. 2) should be "to the"
  • "a strange and misteryous" (pg. 2) should be "mysterious"
  • "Confusion and half-thuths" (pg. 2) should be "half-truths"
  • "go with flow" (pg. 3) should be "go with the flow"
  • "at what moment of the game session you will encounter it." (pg. 3)
  • "Obtain guns before heading out on their mission they will" (pg. 6) doesn't scan - maybe "Obtaining..."?
  • "but the death of his daughter, Sarah gave him" (pg. 6) would read better with an extra comma ("but the death of his daughter, Sarah, gave him") or neither comma ("but the death of his daughter Sarah gave him")
  • "“A bump in road" (pg. 7) should be "“A bump in the road"
  • "sit in a victorian chair in the beach" (pg. 7) should be "sat in a Victorian chair on the beach"
  • "something about the the person presence" (pg. 7) should be "something about the person's presence"
  • "she saw at the newspaper" should be "she saw in the newspaper"
  • "parents must being latin Hispanic" should be "parents must be Latin Hispanic"
  • "looks like it had survived a flood" (pg. 9) should be "looks like it has survived a flood"
  • "somewhere nearby, a dor barks" should be "somewhere nearby, a dog barks"
  • "afterall is rain season" should be "after all it is rain season"
  • "and The investigators are all expected" should be "and the investigators are all expected"
  • "butthey may never" should be "but they may never"
  • "rude folks runkenly yelling" should be ""rude folks drunkenly yelling"

(Actually, this got time-consuming! If you are willing to share an editable document I could edit in-place more quickly than typing this all out.)

Meu, sensacional. Tive tempo apenas de passar apenas uma breve leitura mas o projeto está muito bem construído inclusive as imagens. Parabéns.

Muito obrigado, Guilherme! Espero que curta! Escolhi as imagens a dedo para passar a sensação que meus amigos tiveram quando rodei esse cenário para eles.